Aet Lindling

Interesting! I forget why I didn%u2019t review it at the time but I%u2019ll get to it, and I%u2019m glad you got something out of my review. Thank you for letting ...

Don't be hard on yourself, not enough people do detailed reviews! I thought you did a great job of explaining where to insert paragraph breaks and I hope to see ...

I don't know if this is any comfort, but I do have multiple other readers that have finished all the chapters available. They're just unfortunately not on YWS. And most ...

Thank you so much for this lovely review! You're definitely right about that problem sentence, it could be so much shorter. That would be diabolical of me! A third Davey ...

Yay! Thank you so much for the review and I'm so glad you're enjoying things more now. Yes, maybe the musing could be moved to chapter 18, Overhead. Though it ...

Yay! Thank you so much for all the reviews! You're right that I should have a better transition into thinking about Perfluous.

Thank you so much! You have me nailed, this would have been my next request. I probably do need to establish the friendship between Garrett and Jess better in some ...

I just mean to say that she usually gives up somewhere around the middle of 128, but this time she kept going. Perhaps because she is deeper in thought than ...

Maybe so. Also, it seems I have misled you! Sleezy is an alternative spelling of sleazy, though sleazy is MUCH more common.

The plothole of Garrett and Charlie being roommates before Garrett gets his fancy promotion is something I have worried about already, but I'm glad I am not alone in this ...

You may be right, though the jump is intended to disorient. Perhaps I should restructure. There's another disorienting moment with Keira coming up in an unpublished chapter that might be ...

Also I'm so glad that you enjoyed what you did enjoy! Davey was briefly mentioned in chapter 7, the last Jess chapter, but maybe we should spend a little more ...

That's a GREAT point! I should absolutely add some narration about how Garrett wound up being an impromptu babysitter. Thanks for pointing that out! And thanks a ton for reviewing ...

Thank you for your kind review! I was worried about this chapter and it's nice to get some feedback on it. I plan to go through and format the links ...

Very insightful review! Thank you so much! I'm glad you're warming up to Garrett a bit